Alice was sick of all of this. She couldn’t believe how incompetent the
Queen and King were! They were just
doing whatever they wanted and didn’t even care about the people they were
effecting!
“Sentencing first then reading the verdict!” The Queen declared with the pompous attitude
that Alice was really getting sick of.
“That is not how it goes!” Alice huffed. “You have to hear the verdict before the
sentencing!”
The Queen glared at Alice and started to turn a rather
interesting shade of purple. “OFF WITH
HER HEAD!” She yelled at the top of her lungs.
All of the guards rushed towards Alice with hesitation. Her head was hitting the ceiling of the huge
courtroom. How were they supposed to
control someone who was as tall as the building they were in? They also liked Alice. She didn’t yell like the Queen and actually
seemed to be kind. They all gathered
around Alice, looking up at her, unsure of what to do next.
“Stop, stop, stop!” yelled Alice. “This is not how it is supposed to be! The Queen and King are the people that you
are supposed to want to follow. Not the
people you HAVE to follow! Everyone is
supposed to have a ruler that they want ruling their kingdom. Not a tyrant that does what he or she wants!”
Everyone in the courtroom looked around at each other,
unsure of what to do next. Then, one by
one, all of the cards turned around and faced the Queen and King.
“You have controlled Wonderland enough! We no longer want you to be the rulers of
Wonderland!” one of the cards yelled out.
“Yeah! Enough!” Shouted everyone else in the room, including
the animals in the jury box. The King
and Queen exchanged nervous glances.
Everyone could read their expressions, and it said What was going to happen next loud and clear.
Suddenly, all of the cards charged for the King and Queen
shouting at the top of their voices. It
was all chaos and confusion for a while after that. But eventually, everything calmed down. Everyone in the room stopped and turned to
look at Alice. “Well, what do we do
now?” wondered Alice.
The white rabbit sat up on the stand where the King and
Queen had been before they ran out the door.
“Anyone opposed to Alice becoming Queen of Wonderland, speak now.” The room was quiet. No one said anything. “It is settled then. Alice is the new Queen of Wonderland.”
The room erupted into cheers. Someone gave Alice a piece of cake, where she
became the same size as everyone else.
She then went and ruled Wonderland and Wonderland was the happiest it
had been in a long time.
Author's Note: While taking inspiration from the entire story of Alice in Wonderland, I mainly used Alice's Evidence (cont.). I wanted to take the ending that we all know so well and change it so there is a different ending to the story.
The first paragraph of your story caught my attention right away. I really wanted to know more details on what the Queen and King did to make Alice so mad. The storytelling overall was great. The spacing made it easy to read and follow along. I would suggest to add a title to help catch the reader’s attention and add a little more detail in your author’s note about the original story (since I did not read this unit, I was unsure what had happened). Great job overall!
ReplyDeleteI have not read or watched Alice In Wonderland in a long time, so I had to go re-read the section you were referring to. It seems like you did a nice retelling of the story adding a little twist of your own. I don’t know why, but when everyone turned on the Queen and was backing Alice, it reminded me of the end of The Wizard of Oz.
ReplyDeleteI have to say that you borrowed a little bit more of the original story than I expected, but that wound up building the atmosphere for the story you were trying to tell. Also, it's a little hard for me to imagine that the King and Queen of Wonderland (or anywhere really) were given their charmed status by their subjects (not exactly a democracy). Other than, that I would have liked to see the ending be maybe more complex. If you do that in future stories, you'll be golden!
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